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I almost had to stop reading when I saw the subject header was in cap sand by the time I got to the very subtle use of capslock to convey emotion, I had to admit defeat. I did spot the “inlove” at the end though *facepalm*

ROFLMAO

LMAO. “This makes me want to find her version of Mike and rip his upper lip up over his head to hook on his toes, and then rub habaneros over his fucking gums.” was originally

“This makes me want to find her version of Mike and stuff his ass in a DeLorean set for Mexico City in the 13th century and introduce him to a fucking Xipe Totec priest.”

And yes RAGE. QWERTY FUCKING MASH.

LOL!! Well? I mean… A YEAR????? Then, “Er… yeah don’t feel like it no more k? We cool? Good! Plus… miss you!” That’s just outright abuse.

Ugh, the only reason I even tried to read this one was because it looked like she FINALLY figured out that format matters, but now I’m mad because the story itself is just… lkasjhdlkjadljhadjkahsdjkhasjdhkadNO.

I. HATE. SCRIPT. FORMAT. I will *never* understand why people do that, or why readers accept it! Is it because they don’t read books? Wtf is that about??

I’m about [] this far from telling her very not nicely to stfu and gtfo. She actually told me not to worry because there will be a sequel. DO NOT WANT

I think they do that because it’s easier to write than a proper story format, and readers (seem to) accept it because they don’t want to hurt the writers’ feelings. I’ve seen that around. A LOT.

I read the sequel. If you decide to read it, be warned: Mike doesn’t know what Peter’s problem is (WTF) and is a total idiot, Peter’s a pathetic loser (just like you feared) and totally out of character too, and everything’s basically solved by Mike hopping on top of Peter and kissing him. “Inlove” is repeated 5 times. o_O

I’m kinda starting to feel bad for speaking behind her back. Though it was nice to get that out of my system, I think m’gonna stop now. :)

THERE WILL BE CUTTING. WITH KNIVES.

I never tried it either, but given the lack of description in script format, I imagine it is. I mean, even a slight change of posture can be very revealing, but since they don’t write it (at least I’ve never seen it), they don’t even have to think about it. Result: easier to write, but pretty darn bad text.

I think the main problem with her fics is that she doesn’t think how people would REALLY act IRL. The third part is just as bad – no wait, I wasn’t supposed to say anything anymore… oops :P

I mostly stayed away too, and I probably shouldn’t have read this one either, but I was curious about what she could have written that *required* listening to ABBA.

Yeah, I don’t think she quite grasped what I was talking about either. I think hit the nail on the head when she said she didn’t think she knew how people would really react. I don’t even know how to respond to her latest comment, because it’s nice that she wants to please and everything, but if she really wants to please (me anyway), she would just stop and go live a little.

So, I actually read all three chapters, only because I like to know what I’m speaking about and yes, please go and live a little.
I really hope she’s about 14 or less. That would maybe justify what she posted, because I would want to slap everyone across the face who acts like Peter or Mike in that story and I’m sorry to say that, but the three parts are just completely inconsistent.

I’m sure I’ve seen worse writing in terms of grammar and style (well, except the dialog only stuff maybe), but the actual action… almost absurd.

Oh, and “inlove” isn’t really a word, is it?

She *must* be a child, because even completely sexually stunted teens who’ve never even had crushes understand that if a person jilts their lover like that, the lover is likely to grab the nearest pointy object and go for the jugular.

lmao, I keep thinking “MUST BE A TYPO” every time I see inlove, because my brain refuses to accept the idea that anyone would purposefully spell in love as one word.

What now annoys me even more than her fics are the praising comments she’s getting. I HATE HATE HATE undeserved complimenting because of frienship, or wanting to please, or whatever. I’m getting very close to laughing at the commenter’s face. She must be joking!

Oh and lol, did you see what she said to one of the replies: Believe it or not deary there’s is ANOTHER one. The ending isn’t AS happy, but I think it’s more realistic. (It was also a crowd pleaser. Cause someone didn’t want Mike and Peter together in the end)

And what Peter says in the third part is almost exactly what you said in one of your comments. I don’t even know what to make of this anymore. XD

Now I’m over here having moral dilemmas over whether I should offer to tutor her in basic writing skills or post a certain Picard macro and be done with it.

I used to do the tutoring. It resulted in people being scared of me. *falls off chair* (No kidding!)

LOL PICARD FTW! No, she needs to find her own tutor, man. I don’t like her attitude. -_- I know you’re not being bubbly sweet to her or anything, but the whole “crowd pleaser” comment, and the reference to you as “Dearie” just irritate me.

I’m also offended that she’s assuming you want her to change her story. You never said she should change it, or add another part to it. You said you didn’t like the way Mike behaved, and you didn’t find the situation sad, just angering and pathetic. How is that being interpreted as “Write a different story”? So what if someone didn’t like your story. If YOU like it, fine. This is just an FYI. Don’t act like someone’s begging you to change something, because you’re going to be butt-hurt when that same person doesn’t come and sing your praises after you wrote a WHOLE story just for them. WTF?

WTF WAS HER RESPONSE TO YOU?? Holy crap she is doing this shit on purpose. THERE IS NO WAY SHE IS NOT DOING THIS ON PURPOSE WTF. D:

Also, apparently two people constitutes alot.

Ok why is “criticism” with an s? I swear I wrote it with two Cs! o_O

LOL yeah, I noticed the same. Maybe she’s reading between the lines, sort of. :D

Thanks! :D